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The given diagram indicates information about how used glass bottles are recycled.

The given diagram indicates information about how used glass bottles are recycled.
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The presented diagram illustrates the manufacturing process of
recycle
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recycling
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glass
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bottles
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 after customers
Correct pronoun usage
themused
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used
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use
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
this
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 production consists of three stages, starting from customers using
bottles
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 to selling in
Add an article
the supermarket
a supermarket
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supermarket
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supermarkets
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 for
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the customer
a customer
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customer
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customers
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 to buy
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
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. First of all, after customers used
bottles
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, they throw always
to
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them to
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 collect point and
then
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garbage
Correct article usage
the garbage
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 truck will collect the
bottles
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 to clean
plant
Correct article usage
the plant
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.
Next
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, after
bottles
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 are
clean
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cleaned
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 from high pressurised water, they are
sort
Wrong verb form
sorted
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 including green, brown and clear to
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glass
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the glass
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 factory.
Thus
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, before being melted in
furnace
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a furnace
the furnace
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,
glass
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bottles
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are break
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are broken
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as
Change preposition
into
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 pieces.
Therefore
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, before being
fill
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filled
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 in the block of the new
glass
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 bottle, they
are mix
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are mixed
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 with melted liquid and new liquid
glass
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.
Finally
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, before
glass
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bottles
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 are
selling
Wrong verb form
sold
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 to different places, they
are distributed
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have distributed
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packaging
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in packaging
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, bottles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Recycling
  • Glass bottles
  • Collection
  • Sorting
  • Contaminants
  • Cleaning process
  • Crushing
  • Melting
  • Formation
  • Environmental benefits
  • Energy conservation
  • Landfill
  • Consumer participation
  • Sustainable practices
  • Recycled material
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