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some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. discuss this views and give your own opinion.

#people #time #loss #species #plants #animals
Todays there is a hot debate about the most important environmental problems. Some people believe that
decrease
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the decrease
a decrease
 in
number
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the number
 of some species of plants and animals is more important than others problem,
although
 the rest of the people say that there are far more dangerous environmental issues.
everyone
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Everyone
 knows that, life on Earth depends on the life of plants, because plants hamper soil erosion and
also
 help
to
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in
 the purification of the air,
furthermore
,
Accept space
,
those can produce oxygen which is one of the most important factor for living on the Earth. A
further
 point is that, cities can be preserved from natural disaster
such
 as, floods and storms by trees. About some species of animals, advocate
argue
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argues
 that, if animals, those whose have a key role in
food cycle
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the food cycle
 disappear human's life may face serious problems like starvation.
on
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On
 the other hand, opponents claim that global
warming which
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warming, which
 is due to industrial activities, is another factor needs dealing with. Additional the polar glaciers are melting and because of that, sea level going up and
distructing
draw someone's attention away from something
distracting
 floods
are flowing
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is flowing
.
Also
 human's activities lead to sea water contamination which can be a
biggest
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bigger
big
 cause of decrease in
number
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the number
 of some aquatic creatures and it is necessary to be controlled.
in
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In
 conclusion,
although
 the global warming seems to be a huge problem and causes many dangerous issues, in my opinion, plans annihilation is the main reason of all serious problems, because trees can
purification
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purify
purifies
purifying
purified
 the atmosphere and hamper global warming.

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  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
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