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Write about the following topic: •The television is good for you. •Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of watching television. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #•the #television #•discuss
Nowadays,
television
 has become an imperative source of information for every household. There are many people who can't afford it, and many who can. It has simplified life.
On the other hand
, it has
also
 proved to be a curse for many.
This
 essay will discuss the pros and cons of watching
television
.
Firstly
, watching
television
 keeps an individual up-to-date with the latest trends and developments in the country and abroad. It adds to his or her existing knowledge.
Secondly
, watching
television
 helps to improve and develop one's communication skills,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
.
e
Suggestion
E
listening
Suggestion
is listening
, writing, reading or speaking. Watching English channels
like
Suggestion
Like
 BBC, Discovery etc.
adds
Suggestion
Adds
 to a person's vocabulary which can be applied in daily communication. Some of the ill effects of watching
television
 are, it has an adverse effect on a person's
eyes
Suggestion
eye
. Recently, there have been many cases relating to poor vision due to excess watching of
television
.
Also
, while watching
television
 an individual usually keep on sitting for a long time and
this
 habit adds to obesity and other health problems. People, especially children tend to learn bad language because of
television
,
also
 it has a negative impact on the child's mental and physical condition. So to sum up, I believe watching
television
 sometimes is a good habit and should be followed regularly. Excessive watching should be prevented.
Also
, people should
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 in family programs and movies so that they can sit together and enjoy watching it, rather than watching some channels separately and having a negative impact on their mind and body.
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