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In many countries there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction . What measures could be taken ro prevent this .

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-These days, many countries are developing because of
this
 item they produce products and build constructions. These conditions can lead to bad reasons. In
this
 essay I will discuss about
this
 dilemma. And I will try to give some examples on how we can prevent of
this
 riddle. The main reason of declining quality of breath, and rain is that the injurious smoke of mills and factories. Actually, It has a bad influence of the breeze.
For example
, most industrialized countries - China's air is so much ruined because of industry.
In other words
 the economy of some countries is running from industry and producing. The solution of
this
 problem is that governments should decrease the producing and building constructions for several times. Take something the same complication of the world Coronavirus is influenced
firstly
 to Chine. But some scientists believe that Coronavirus has a good side suitable for wind. The air of Chine was cleaned. At
last
 the slowing down producing is helping to clean the wind. The
next
 huge problem with declining quality of drink. The rain is our life source. One of the main causes of obstruction water is throwing out huge amount of harmful pollutants to drink.
For example
, many factories and mills have not any idea where put the spoilages. And some of them, especially dishonest throw out it into valuable rain.
In other words
,
this
this
 pollutant contains a lot of different elements that ruined from chemical elements. The solution is governments should increase of safety, ecology and must criminal responsibility
such
 kind of people.
As a result
 more people will be avoid from throwing harmful pollutants into water.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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