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In many countries today, there are concerns about the unhealthy lifestyles that people lead. What health issues are linked to modern lifestyles? What answers to these problems can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and support your essay with ideas and examples from your own experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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The development of social-economy is resulting in the significant changes in people's lifestyles. From my perspective,
such
 modern lifestyles are linked to several alarming health problems and I believe that there are certain measures for them. More and more health issues have been reported to implicate to people's modern living habits. The most increasingly popular one is
obesity
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obese
. Today, it is not hard to find someone with an oversized and overweight body on the streets, in school campuses or anywhere in urban areas of the developing and developed countries. Another popular disease is diabetes, which a lot of people, especially the elderly, are miserably facing. If you ask some relatives of yours or your friends that whether they are taking some medication for diabetes,
thenthen
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then then
 the could be a number of the "Yes" answers. What is more, thousands of people's lives are deprived every year
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 cancers. It can say that cancers nowadays present in any regions of any country. In terms of solutions, people
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