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some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundation subject whether or not it is used later in life. Discuss both sides

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Learning of mathematics has become a debatable topic among parents. Nowadays, with
change
Suggestion
the change
a change
 in
mind sets
a habitual or characteristic mental attitude that determines how you will interpret and respond to situations
mindsets
, some parents think that learning mathematics at
school
 is redundant whereas some believe that it is an important subject and must be taught. We will discuss both these aspects in debt. Many parents believe that mathematics does not play major role in life and it is not worth teaching mathematics as part of
school
Suggestion
the school curriculum
curriculum
. With
increasing technological advancement
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the increasing technological advancement
, parents think that all the calculations are automated. All the computations and estimations are calculated on computer software's and manual calculation is eliminated. These parents have a good reason to believe that mathematics as a subject is no longer relevant in
school
. Various parents
also
 think that knowledge of mathematics is important as it clears the fundamentals. It
also
 helps an individual in
various paths
Suggestion
the various paths
 of life and
also
 helps to stay sharp and focused.
For instance
, a person
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
 math might be able to compute numbers easily which will eventually help him in decision making. As per the above,
this
 particular set of parents
believe
Suggestion
believes
 that mathematics has a great impact on one's life. Parents are concerned about their children and they tend to believe in various aspects related to
school
curriculum
 and definitely mathematics is an important topic. Various parents are in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of mathematics are a
subject whereas
Accept comma addition
subject, whereas
 some think that it is not important.
This
 essay discussed various aspects, why math should be part of
school
curriculum
 and why it should not be part of
curriculum
Suggestion
the curriculum
.
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