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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Introduction
It is believed by some that our history have not anything to learn for nowadays, while a considered number of people think that our past events are important clues in understanding the life of people, In my opinion, I believe like other people that past events are important in our lifestyle and we can learn a lot from them differently from some people that they think they are useless.
Body paragraph 1
It is believed that here is anything we can learn from our past events.
Body paragraph 2
In other words
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, while studying
past
Suggestion
the past
, most of the humans are more based on memorizing facts, dates and names which in daily life we rarely use.
Body paragraph 3
Despite
this
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 fact, learning your own past is important as it defines somehow who you are and your tradition.
Body paragraph 4
Most of society is relying on their traditions which have generated from ancestor to new generations.
Body paragraph 5
It is mainly thought that our ancestor events contain vital data to appreciate and figure out human`s life.
Body paragraph 6
History helps the youth to understand their own culture and their culture and country have evolved during different period and
also
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 gives people identity and unify them. .
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So, history
remain
Suggestion
remains
 crucial in the present and future as it gives people information about important events which always should be remembered in order to not happen again and
also
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 to honour the people who fight for their rights. Holocaust is the prime example of what miseries were done to Jewish people by Hitler.
This
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 unfair war should be always told to new generations so they can continue to remember those discriminated people who fought for their rights.
Conclusion
To conclude,
although
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 it is considered by some people that learning past is a waste of time, in my opinion past events carry enormous useful information which we can be able to identify, unify and past our traditions to our new generations. So historical events are not a waste of time, but should be learnt and see as a great source of information.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • learn from past mistakes
  • a valuable source of information
  • modern-day challenges
  • rapid technological change
  • social values
  • historical records
  • biased accounts
  • repeat the mistakes of the past
  • draw lessons from history
  • economic crisis
  • public health measures
  • environmental damage
  • government policy
  • cultural identity
  • a broader perspective
  • make informed decisions
  • adapt past lessons
  • current circumstances
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