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Write about the following topic: Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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some persons tend to do the same thing
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throughout
 their age
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saying that
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 more beneficial to alleviate alters.
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, others believe that we should change what we do regularly. Both points of view will be illustrated in detail.
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, as we live in a technological
advancement
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advancement in life,
life
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, most of people would prefer to have a routine
life
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 doing the same things. The circumstances
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which, forced
 by our time
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made us to be more stable than before. A recent survey shows that in the period between 1950 and 1990 about 70% of people said that the redundant daily
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 is better
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while 30% support changes in their
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statistics
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statistic
 reversed after 1990
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 of the advent of technology
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so technology has a vital effect on people's attitudes toward things they do.
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, people who choose to do various things, found to have a high level in
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IQ tests
an IQ test
, which means that the diversity of their activities have led to boost their intelligence
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To have a flexible
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 might help you to gain the necessary skills to be recruited for most of
jobs
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the jobs
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, an article
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has been published
 in 2012 states that doing different things would help people to overcome any difficulties may face during career
life
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, Doing many things would increase not only your intelligence but
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 your ability to acquire more skills To sum up, all of us have the right to choose their approach in
life
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. Personally, I think changes should be the backbone of our
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in order to make it tasty and enjoyable at the same time.

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