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Some argue that the climate change is an issue. Do you agree that?

#argue #climate #change
I think education should be more about understanding of what happened rather than memorising what happened because education should push people into analysing, evaluating. Yes, now we are living in the information age, and new ideas have been never more important, so encouraging children to have their own ideas can
lead new ideas
Suggestion
lead to new ideas
 that can help improve our lives. They can encourage them.
For example
, teachers can congratulate children when they come with new ideas. They can give them a good mark when they have a good
idea
 about a course given. They can be always positive about
ideas
Suggestion
the ideas
 brought by children. To make a company more successful in business,
company
Suggestion
a company
companies
the company
 should always come with new and better ideas because they
are likely be
Suggestion
are likely being
have likely been
 in
fiercly
Suggestion
fair
fairly
 competition, so it is sensible for a company to encourage their employees to produce useful ideas. Implementation of an old
idea
 is generally considered acceptable, because people who have to implement it have already known how to do it probably, so it can be seen time-consuming and even annoying for some when one comes with
an
Suggestion
a
 new
idea
 to implement. Many think that putting something into practice is generally a hard process. I
am partly agree
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partly agree
am partly agreeing
have partly agreed
 with that, but I
also
 argue that coming with a new
idea
 can be compelling and sometimes even harder than applying it. I have been in cold weather many times. I live in Istanbul, and you can experience four seasons there. It is not often cold, because Istanbul's
climate
 is kind of similar with
mediterranean
the largest inland sea; between Europe and Africa and Asia
Mediterranean
climate
. Yes, eastern parts of the country are colder than western parts, because these areas are generally away from a water area, and they are generally mountainous. I don't think I would prefer
live
Suggestion
living
 in either cold places or hot places. I don't like too hot and cold
climate
, so I would prefer to live in a place of which
climate
 is mild, and in which you can experience different climates.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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