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Some people think that there should be some strict controls about noise. Others think that they can just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is widely argued by some that the amount of
noise
 produced by people should strictly be under control, while others think that there should be limitations on the amount of
noise
 we produce. Even if I have some sympathy with the former idea, I believe that everyone should make
noise
 if he wants to.
To begin
 with, there are really good reasons why
noise
 should be controlled.
First
 of all it has
detrimental effect
Suggestion
a detrimental effect
 on people's health in some ways, especially on older ones.
That is
 to say, constant exposure to pitch
noise
 will undoubtedly cause headaches or hearing problems which
is
Suggestion
are
 likely to dramatically reduce one's health levels.
Secondly
, it deters individuals from concentrating.
For instance
, a student preparing for his exams can not focus and immerse in his studies if his neighbours sing too loud. It seems to be unfair in relation
with
Suggestion
to
 others.
On the other hand
, as far as I am concerned, producing
noise
 is one type of recreational activities. Many people find it to be enjoyable and relaxing to sing loudly karaoke or cheering for a football club in the stadium. It is wrong to prevent people from having access to relaxation.
Moreover
, scientists have already invented walls or Windows that can deter
noise
 from getting inside which means that
this
 problem can be tackled without any controls. To conclude, while affecting
humans'
Suggestion
human
 health, producing
noise
 could be the best way of relieving stress and tiredness. Despite
this
, in today's world,
noise
 could be easily avoided. Personally, I believe that no restrictions should be imposed on the amount of
noise
 we can produce.

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