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Some people think that there should be strict controls about noise. Others think that they can just make as much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #controls #noise
Nowadays cities
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Nowadays, cities
 become more
fustling
the stealing of cattle
rustling
. The dense traffic and many other reasons are contributing
this
. So people have heated argument about
this
. Some people think that
fustling
abstaining from food
fasting
 must be
controled
restrained or managed or kept within certain bounds
controlled
. They want to live in tranquility so these people don't tolerate noisy places it means that these people are often related to old folk.
In
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On
 the other
hand there
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hand, there
 are people whose prefer to make noise in different places. These people don't like the monotony it means they would like to lead the intensive way of life. How
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 said, these people are often young folk. I think that both groups of people are
rights
Suggestion
right
. In the end I expect that uproar will be controled but there will be created chances for people who like to noise
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