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You have invited a friend to visit you next month. Unfortunately, you are not able to meet him/her. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, – Apologize for the change of plans – Explain why you are unable to meet him/her – Suggest another time for him/her to visit.

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Dear Ifeoma, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I’m writing to deeply apologize for the fact that, unfortunately, I’ll not be around for your scheduled visit
this
 coming month, because I will be on a two-month induction training for my new job. I suppose the Easter holiday would be a great time for the next movie night. I’m so sorry that, I won’t be around for our next film night, was really looking forward to
this
 leisure activity which means so much to me, I hope you can forgive me
?
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 CRA has offered me the assistant administrative officer role, it’s a dream come true right?
Therefore
, I will be off for training in Abuja in two days, and I won’t be back until March since the training lasts for two months. If it’s okay for you, can we shift our get-together to the
last
 week of March, which is around the Easter break?
Hence
,
to
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allow me some time to find my feet after the training and you'll
also
 have
a
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some
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timeoff
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time off
then
. So sorry about
this
 turnout of events. Hope you’ll forgive me, do you write back soon. Warm regards, Ebere.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure the letter is organized in a clear, logical manner. While your letter has a good structure, a clearer transition between paragraphs can enhance readability.
Task Response
In the opening, briefly mention your regret and anticipation to see your friend, as this frames your apology and the change of plans positively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use varied linking words and phrases to improve flow between sentences and paragraphs. Although your current use is good, more diversity can make your writing more cohesive.
Task Response
To strengthen the task response, you could further personalize the apology by suggesting activities for the new visit date. This shows more consideration and anticipation of your friend's possible preferences.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Apologize sincerely - 'I am really sorry,' 'Please accept my apologies,' 'It pains me to inform you.'
  • Change of plans - 'Due to unforeseen circumstances,' 'I regret to inform,' 'An unexpected situation has arisen.'
  • Reason for change - 'Unfortunately, I have been called away on business,' 'A family emergency has come up,' 'I have an unavoidable commitment'
  • Assurances - 'Believe me, this was not anticipated,' 'I regret any inconvenience this may cause,' 'I hope you can understand my predicament'
  • Alternative suggestions - 'Could we reschedule your visit to...,' 'How about meeting up during the...,' 'Would it be possible for you to come at a later date?'
  • Eagerness to meet - 'I am eager to catch up,' 'I look forward to our meeting,' 'I am excited at the prospect of seeing you soon.'
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