In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

During the
last
decade an increasingly larger percentage of people suffer from health problems caused by consuming meals in fast foods. Why do fast foods have gained so much success and how can
this
be frighted? Fast foods have gained a very high popularity in the
last
decades principally because of the cheapness of their products: you are able to have a complete meal by spending just a few dollars.
However
, Fast
foods’
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food’s
increasing popularity has been accompanied by a consequent increase in health problems because the
food
that is
sold by common fast foods, like Macdonalds or KFC, is what mostly is far from healthy. The over mentioned
food
is rich of
conservants
, it is made by using very low quality raw materials, and
this
is
also
the reason why their prices are pretty much low. A possible solution to
this
problem could be introducing higher taxes on these types of foods so to discourage people to buy them.
Moreover
, It’s not only an economic reason which explains
fast foods’ success but
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the fast foods’ success, but
the fast foods’ success but
a “fastness” reason
also
has to be investigated. In
fact in
Accept comma addition
fact, in
large cities,
such
as New York
city
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City
or London, generally workers
receive
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receives
very small time windows from their works to spend for having
lunches
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lunch
so that they are forced to eat at fast foods to earn time and come back to work rapidly. So, despite of increasing taxes I suppose it would be a better idea to incentive the opening of “healthier” fast foods
,
Accept space
,
which sell salads, vegetable based meals, fruits and so on. I think
this
solution would impact positively on the
food
commerce and it can be supported by few good achievements obtained by healthy fast foods that have been opened recently in different cities.
For example
, Chiquita fast
food
is a place where people can enjoy fresh smoothies, and milkshakes made
by
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with
from
of
fresh fruits and vegetables. It had gained a lot of success so that there was a period in which you were not able to walk through streets and do not see someone with a
smoothy
having a surface free from roughness or bumps or ridges or irregularities
smooth
in
hands
Suggestion
the hands
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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