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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are applying for a job and need a letter of reference from someone who knew you when you were at school. Write a letter to one of your old teachers asking for a reference. In your letter: say what job you have applied for explain why you want this job suggest what information the teacher should include Write at least 150 words. Begin your letter as follows:

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Dear Mrs. Robins, I am writing to obtain a
letter
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 of reference from you, as I am applying for a job at a research centre. The application process requires a
letter
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 of recommendation from a professor at the
last
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 academic institution that the applicant attended. The role I am applying for is closely associated
to
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 the graphic processing units that I studied under your guidance, and
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 the chosen engineer to carry out stress testing using various parameters for the machine. It doesn't involve floor-level mundane tasks
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 as cleaning shields or repairing markers, and
this
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 is what excites me. Let me explain to you, how valuable
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 is to my application. The selection criteria
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 a
three step
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 process, and
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letter
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 filters applicants in round one when resume-based shortlisting shows similar profile strengths. A strong
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, would not only increase my chances of selection
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 but
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 place me well amongst others in round three, where applicants are rated for their
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academic
 achievements as listed by their graduate professors. I suggest you
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kindly include all my experiments and their synopsis that I performed for your courses at the university as bullet points.
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letter
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 would be even stronger if some technical readings from our research
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 mentioned concisely,
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 what responsibilities you had as a mentor. I would be even glad if you could provide citations to our publications. Thank you for your consideration. Yours sincerely, David
Beckhem
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Beckham
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that the flow between paragraphs is smoother by using more transitional words or phrases.
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Be specific about the job title and focus on clarity throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are both very appropriate and formal.
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The letter includes all the necessary information, such as job role, reason for applying, and suggested content for the reference letter.
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You have maintained a suitable tone throughout the letter which enhances its formality and appropriateness.
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