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Some people think that living in city can be stressful. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, it is becoming more and more popular to live in cities. More and more people
are preferring
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prefer
 to lead urban lifestyles and
therefore
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 moving to cities. Despite
this
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, some people argue that
life
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 in
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city
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the city
cities
a city
 might sometimes be stressful.
Although
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 I have some sympathy with
this
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 idea, I believe that
life
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 in
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city is never
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the city has never been
city has been never
the city has been never
the city is never
cities is never
 bad.
To begin
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 with, one of the biggest advantages of living in cities is better quality of
life
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.
That is
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 to say, in many cases, you have access to the range of facilities
such
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 as transport, emergency or entertainment facilities.
This
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 makes your
life
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 easier and more exciting. Another positive aspect of cities is
sense
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the sense
a sense
 of community you have. There are plenty of people around you whom you can strike up friendships or talk with.
As a result
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, you will feel less isolated and become more
interractive
used especially of drugs or muscles that work together so the total effect is greater than the sum of the two (or more)
interactive
 as an individual. Turning to the other side of the argument,
life
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 in
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city
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the city
a city
cities
 might be quite dangerous. To be more precise, crime
rates there
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rates, there
 are higher than in rural areas which means that parents should always care about their offsprings.
For instance
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, you can see plenty of news related to offences
such
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 as murder or theft taking place in cities through social media or Tv. Another drawback of cities is the fact that they are unhealthy places to live. Owing to increased levels of car ownership and industrialization, different toxic substances are released into
air
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the air
 making it more polluted.
This
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 can cause more people to suffer from respiratory diseases
such
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 as
asthma which
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asthma, which
 I think is really serious problem. To conclude, there are both positives and negatives of living in urban areas. While being more interesting and enjoyable, they are dangerous and unhealthy places to live in. In my opinion, though,
city
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life
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 is always good.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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