Some people argue that it is not wise for an industry to replace its experienced but old workers with new and young yet inexperienced individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's competitive era, everyone has wanted to chase
thier
of them or themselves
their
there
competitors.
some
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Some
people say that it is not
right decision
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the right decision
to replace
ed
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Ed
old
oldery
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
older y
employees by young worker. I totally opposed
this
argument by providing below information.
First
and foremost, if
company
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the company
a company
does not
retired
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retire
old people than the unemployment of that nation getting
increase
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an increase
because some
company
has decided to
recruite
register formally as a participant or member
recruit
recreate
certain number
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a certain number
of people in a year.
For instance
, I am working
with multinational
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with a multinational company
company
where they have decided to hire 50 new people in every year.
In addition
, they do not want to keep more employees because in the
last
they avoid
cost
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the cost
of employment.
Furthermore
, old worker
can not
can not
cannot
work for long time constantly, like, young
ma
an adult person who is male (as opposed to a woman)
man
around 20-25 years old can work almost 6-7 hours continuously without any break but old age people wanted break in every 2-3 hours.
consequently
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Consequently
, it is
affect
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affected
to the productivity of their employer where they are working and, no one wants that their
company
going
in
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into
loss. In contrary, many industries do not want to
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
their experienced people. They think, their
expereince
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experience
experiences
would be better that
any
quantifier; used with either mass nouns or plural count nouns to indicate an unspecified number or quantity
some
fresh people and
thay
people in general
they
have to give training to new employee. Somehow, some companies keep their loyal and honest employees. They are respecting their dedicated workers
that
is
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are
the big reason and we heard several times
this
phrase "old is gold". In conclusion, for growth of any country, industries have to give chance to youth and minimise violation like bully,
hiest
raise or haul up with or as if with mechanical help
hoist
host
highest
etc.
because
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Because
of unemployment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • experienced
  • old workers
  • young
  • inexperienced
  • replace
  • industry
  • wise
  • argue
  • valuable
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • loss of expertise
  • lack
  • necessary
  • experience
  • maturity
  • diverse
  • workforce
  • mix
  • age groups
  • beneficial
  • focus
  • providing opportunities
  • continuous learning
  • development
  • balanced approach
  • smooth transition
  • maintain productivity
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