Some people argue that it is not wise for an industry to replace its experienced but old workers with new and young yet inexperienced individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #industry #workers #individuals

In today's competitive era, everyone has wanted to chase

thier

of them or themselves

their

there

competitors.

some

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Some

people say that it is not

right decision

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the right decision

to replace

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old

oldery

advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)

older

older y

employees by young worker. I totally opposed

this

argument by providing below information.

First

and foremost, if

company

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the company

a company

does not

retired

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retire

old people than the unemployment of that nation getting

increase

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an increase

because some

company

has decided to

recruite

recruit

recreate

certain number

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a certain number

of people in a year.

For instance

, I am working

with multinational

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with a multinational company

company

where they have decided to hire 50 new people in every year.

In addition

, they do not want to keep more employees because in the

last

they avoid

cost

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the cost

of employment.

Furthermore

, old worker

can not

cannot

work for long time constantly, like, young

an adult person who is male (as opposed to a woman)

man

around 20-25 years old can work almost 6-7 hours continuously without any break but old age people wanted break in every 2-3 hours.

consequently

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Consequently

, it is

affect

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affected

to the productivity of their employer where they are working and, no one wants that their

company

going

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into

loss. In contrary, many industries do not want to

loose

fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense

lose

their experienced people. They think, their

expereince

the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities

experience

experiences

would be better that

any

quantifier; used with either mass nouns or plural count nouns to indicate an unspecified number or quantity

some

fresh people and

thay

people in general

they

have to give training to new employee. Somehow, some companies keep their loyal and honest employees. They are respecting their dedicated workers

that

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are

the big reason and we heard several times

this

phrase "old is gold". In conclusion, for growth of any country, industries have to give chance to youth and minimise violation like bully,

hiest

raise or haul up with or as if with mechanical help

hoist

host

highest

etc.

because

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Because

of unemployment.

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

254 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

experienced
old workers
young
inexperienced
replace
industry
wise
argue
valuable
skills
knowledge
loss of expertise
lack
necessary
experience
maturity
diverse
workforce
mix
age groups
beneficial
focus
providing opportunities
continuous learning
development
balanced approach
smooth transition
maintain productivity

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Some people argue that it is not wise for an industry to replace its experienced but old workers with new and young yet inexperienced individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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