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It is generally agreed that fewer people today write letters (through the mail or post) compared with the twentieth century. What factors have led to this situation? What will the impact be on the lives of future generations?

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A broad agreement of comparison between nowadays and a century before
signs
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the signs
 that fewer people apply
mail
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 system to send letters.
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essay
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essay, then
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 will
identifies
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identify
 reasonable causes and estimates effects on later
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 relating to
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 circumstance. Regarding the causes, many people invent a plausible excuse that sending a message through electronic
mail
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 offers more considerable benefits than via
post
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 office.
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, it is widely known that mailing letters through email is faster than that through traditional
post
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.
Example
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An example
The example
 can be seen from the fact that postman normally spends more than a day for addressing
mail
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, while in only a brief
seconds
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second
,
e-
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mail
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 provider can deliver our letters.
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, as technologies are
developing
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developed
, it is often said that
e-
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mail
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are
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is
 more available for wider society than
mail
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.
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 means that sending letters via
e-
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mail
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 is now accessible for people in some remote areas where they often encounter technical difficulty in coming into
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post office
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the post office
a post office
post offices
. Turning to the potential impacts, it is expected for later
generation
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 that
this
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 circumstance will dictate people to
relatively lack
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the relative lack
relative lack
 of handwriting skill if they previously tend to apply
e-
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mail
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 system.
This
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 is because person intensively writes a message by handwriting style in order to devote attention in letters, so
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 skill will decrease as there is no requisite to adopt. Another possible effect is a rise in unemployment numbers, meaning that job opportunities as
postman
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the postman
 will not be available for the
next
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generation
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 due to postman’s services remaining by no means essential.
This
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 happens when fewer people implement
mail
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 system,
thus
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post
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 office will be dissolved. Overall, it is possible to conclude that the benefits from
e-
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mail
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, fast delivery and widespread availability, enhance people to write electronic
mail
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.
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,
this
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 will address some impacts
on coming
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oncoming
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generation
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generation, such
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 as lack of handwriting and a rise in unemployment numbers.

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