Should governments make decisions about people's lifestyle or should people make their own decisions.

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One school of thoughts reckons that authorities should take control over the
citizens
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citizens'
decisions.
On the contrary
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, there is
counter arguement
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a counter argument
counter argument
the counter argument
that folks should have rights to make their own resolutions. I am going to scrutinize on both aspects in forthcoming paragraphs before forming an opinion in the
last
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.
First
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of all, individuals have the rights to live according to their own wishes. In some democratic nations,
government
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the government
provide
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provides
basic rights and freedom to
denizens
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Denizens
denizens'
for better prosperity of their lives.
For instance
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, masses can live anywhere in their
own their
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own, their
built houses and find their desired jobs to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their needs and amenities.
Consequently
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, individuals can only dwell by self-
dependentnants
Suggestion
and
reliance and
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reliance, and
if, in case of external
interferances
a policy of intervening in the affairs of other countries
interferences
interference
, they feel uncomfortable and cannot do anything freely.
Moreover
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,
masses
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the masses
become more responsible and self-dependent by making significant
decisives
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decisions
decisive
by their own.
On the contrary
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, it is mandatory for law making
bureaucrates
an official of a bureaucracy
bureaucrats
that they should impose some restrictions on offensive crimes.
For example
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, drugs dealing, alcohol mining, bank robberies should take into consideration seriously by police and law making administrations.
Nevertheless
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, if crimes and
offenses
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offences
become basic priorities for criminals, so it results
to
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in
worse circumstances for societies. Moving to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
instance, wake of corona virus affected throughout the world, which provoke governments of
al
quantifier; used with either mass or count nouns to indicate the whole number or amount of or every one of a class
all
nations to take
step
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steps
of lockdowns in entire nations. Meanwhile, the situation
become
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becomes
so tense,
thats
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that's
why for the better maintenance of people authorities make decisions.
Therefore
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, some decisions which are
unappropriate regarding
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appropriate, regarding
appropriate regarding
people should be
control
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controlled
by
authorities
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the authorities
. To recapitulate, it is irrefutable that decisions are mandatory for every individual as
basic right
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a basic right
, but I personally believe that some legal decisions taken by government have significant role
itself
the thing named or in question
it
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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