Some People argue that technological inventions, such as mobile phones, are making people socially less interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is agreed that technology has made human life better and has provided better ways of performing
efficeintly
with efficiency; in an efficient manner
efficiently
in different sectors of life.
However
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, some sections of society would argue that technological
advacements
encouragement of the progress or growth or acceptance of something
advancements
advancement
has made
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have made
people’s life
digitalized
put into digital form, as for use in a computer
digitalised
and lack human interactions, especially
inventons
the creation of something in the mind
inventions
like the mobile phones. With the advent of mobile phones and smart phones, people have stopped interacting with other people
phusically but
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physically, but
physically but
the same technology has
also
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enabled many to connect with each other over long distances. Before the invention of modern mobile phones or smart phones, people used to communicate via letters or through landline phones, the former being time consuming and the latter required
propoer
marked by suitability or rightness or appropriateness
proper
infarastructure
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructure
infrastructures
for communication which might even undergo physical damage. Cell phones
on the other hand
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were fast in communicating and didn’t require much infrastructure to function.
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Thus people
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Thus, people
in far remote places would
also
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communicate with the world.
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, it is a costly affair to provide individual landline connections to every house in a small remote village rather
than to providing a
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than providing a
single mobile tower that might serve multiple villages. Modern smart phones
also
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have the ability of video calling which in some cases would be
benefical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
for contacting people in far off places,
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however people
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however, people
are limiting themselves to the these 6-7inch screen. They prefer to have a multi video chat on their mobile phones from the comfort of
there
of them or themselves
their
couches rather than meeting outside in person and interacting. In conclusion, I would agree, to some extent, that mobile devices has made people socially less interactive but on a large picture
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innovations have bridged the gap between people and made them come closer.
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