The chart below show the number of Japanese tourist travelling abroad between 1985 1995
The first chart illustrates the
amount
of Japanese tourists which had travelled abroad during the period 1985 to 1995. And the Change the quantifier
number
second
chart shows the
Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.
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to
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tourists Correct your spelling
Japanese
travelled
abroad peaked in 1995. Indeed, there was a steady increase Wrong verb form
travelling
while
in 1985 there were more than 4million
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4 million
travelers
. Change the spelling
travellers
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there was not a big rise
about 5.8 Correct your spelling
raise
million
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people travelled abroad Correct your spelling
Japanese
during
1985 compared with 6.5 Change preposition
in
million
in 1987. It has gradual increase more than 8 million
japan people went abroad in 1998 and it reached approximately 11million
in 1990. There was not a big decline in 1991. Travelling Correct article usage
a 11million
for
foreign countries dropped Change preposition
to
just
over 10 Change preposition
by just
million
in 1991. Finally
, travelling abroad shows a steady increase over the period 1994-1995. While
there were about 14million
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14 million
travelers
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travellers
in
abroad in 1994, in 1995 the number peaked Change preposition
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to
nearly Change preposition
at
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a 17million
17million
.Correct your spelling
17 million
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