The chart below show the number of Japanese tourist travelling abroad between 1985 1995
The first chart illustrates the
amount
of Japanese tourists which had travelled abroad during the period 1985 to 1995. And the Change the quantifier
number
second
chart shows the
Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.
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Japanese
travelled
abroad peaked in 1995. Indeed, there was a steady increase Wrong verb form
travelling
while
in 1985 there were more than 4million
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4 million
travelers
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travellers
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there was not a big rise
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Japanese
during
1985 compared with 6.5 Change preposition
in
million
in 1987. It has gradual increase more than 8 million
japan people went abroad in 1998 and it reached approximately 11million
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by just
million
in 1991. Finally
, travelling abroad shows a steady increase over the period 1994-1995. While
there were about 14million
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14 million
travelers
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travellers
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abroad in 1994, in 1995 the number peaked Change preposition
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to
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at
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a 17million
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17 million
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