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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#country #language
People all around the world use different
language
 to communicate with each other. Some people believe that living foreign country where
language
 differs with yours can cause antisocial issues.
Although
this
 situation makes difficulties
to
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of
 immigrants, I think, people have tendency to cope with difficulties. The noticeable issue is connected with their
work
 experiences. It is obvious that people have to
work
 for
living
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a living
. It might become difficult to find
suitable job
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a suitable job
suitable jobs
 in abroad, but immigrant can do online working in order to pay their daily expenditures until learning
local
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the local language
language
.
Furthermore
, if they have come from
country
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countries
a country
 where English is
first
language
 might help them to
work big companies
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work in big companies
. On the one hand, become resident in overseas might occur noticeable hardness to immigrants. While people live in
this
 condition they
might be struggle
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might struggle
 with
situation
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the situation
situations
a situation
 when the have to communicate with local people.
For instance
, they might ask about location of market or bus station. If they do not know
local
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the local language
language
, they might become embarrassed and do not talk.
This
 kind of situations make tendency
to
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for
of
in
 people to become antisocial.
However
, incomers can solve
this
 issue by attending
language
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 and trainings, so they can gain knowledge not
also
 for learning communication, but
also
 collect some
work
 experience. To sum up,
although
 living abroad without communication skills is difficult, after a period the immigrant can improve his own
language
 experience.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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