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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The tables illustrate the percentage of
school
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 children attending four different types of secondary
school
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 from 2000 to 2009. İt is evident that
whereas
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 the community schools experienced a marked increase in the proportion of those attending their institutions over the period the others saw a corresponding decline. The tables show that most of the children went to voluntary controlled
school
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of
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it was so famous in 2000 but
this
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 popularity is the rapid decrease in 2009 and
also
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 the community schools were crowded compared to other 2009. İn 2000 specialist
schools-s
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schools
 gradually decrease from %12
to
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%
10
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to 10
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 in 2009. To add to
this
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 grammar
school
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 was decreased step by step. The percentage of
the
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attendance was %24 in 2000 but later it would be %12 in 2009.
Voluntary
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The voluntary
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school
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 was so crowded in 2000 but later it declined
up
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by
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%20 in 2009.
By contrast
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, community schools
was
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were
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 not so popular in 2000 but
the
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their
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 popularity was being increased sharply. After that, Most of the people took place
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this
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at this
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school
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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