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In some time countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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It is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break from studying after graduating from high school. The trend is not restricted to rich students only who have the money to travel, but
also
 evident among the poorer students who choose to work and become more economically independent for a period of time. The reason for
this
 trend may involve the recognition that a young adult who passes directly from school to university is rather restricted in terms of general knowledge and experience of the world.
In contrast
, those who have spent some time earning a living or travelling to other places, have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on. They tend to be more independent, which is a very important factor in academic study and research, as well as giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of student life.
However
, there are certain dangers in taking time off at the important age. Young adults may end up never returning to their studies or finding at difficult to adapt to an academic environment. They may think that it is better to continue in a particular job, or to do something completely different from a university course. But overall, I think
this
 is less likely today, when academic qualifications are essential for getting a reasonable career. I firmly believe that, young people should be encouraged to break their boundaries.
That is
 the best way for them to get the perspective of what they are hoping to do with their lives and why. Students with
such
 phenomena are usually the most effective and motivated once and taking a year off may be the best way to gain
this
.
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