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Many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boys and girls in schools. Others disagree and believe it is a waste of school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Cooking has always been considered as one of the essential skills that had to be learned
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 Taking into consideration the fast moving world
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some opine that it should be taught in schools to both the genders
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 while others argue that it is a waste of time and resources
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 Proponents are of the notion that cooking has always been considered as one of the essential skills that had to be learned. They believe being cooking expert, at a younger age, seems to be helpful not only to choose
this
 as a future career path but would change the attitude towards life.
That is
 to say,
such
 students probably have a sympathetic approach towards their loved ones after knowing the hardships of the kitchen chores and are likely to assist them.
For example
, parents of these students are noticed to be happier than those who does not practice cooking. What opponents highlight is that, schools are meant to impart technical as well as theoretical knowledge in
children which
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children, which
 would help them to acquire better job prospects. They say, learning cooking skills would substantially reduce the
intented
resulting from one's intentions
intended
 hours for relevant academic subjects which would be a great loss. Since
such
 skills can be practised at home, they felt that school hours can be utilized
optimum
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optimally
 by scheduling more hours for subjects
such
 as maths and science. To conclude, despite being time consuming, acquisition of
such
 skills are considered to be helpful in the long run, for
one can
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one, can
 discover
interest
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an interest
 in cooking and continue it as a career.
Also
,
such
 a proactive move would end up with creating a close knit family after inculcating the habit of helping each other.
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