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Some people think that when a person travels into a different cultures they should adopt to the local practices and customs. To what extent do u agree?

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According to some people when we visit a foreign country we should accept its customs and practices. In my
opinion
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opinion, one
one
 should only accept those elements of the foreign culture which
one
 finds comfortable.
To begin
 with acceptance of
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 culture and lifestyle symbolizes respect for the new community and promote healthy human relationship among peoples. While visiting foreign countries
one
 should try to embrace the foreign style of
dressin
savory dressings for salads; basically of two kinds: either the thin French or vinaigrette type or the creamy mayonnaise type
dressing
, food habits and other practices only if
one
 finds them peasant to follow. Tourism
encourage
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encourages
is encouraging
 people to accept and welcome other cultures. A well said quotes
is
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are
 "when you are in Rome, do as
Romans
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the Romans
 do".
every
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Every
 region has their own religious beliefs and way of living and people should have the freedom to choose the best lifestyle for themselves. On the flip side, a person does not forget their own cultures. He should not adopt all the cultural values of foreigners. He should celebrate and preserve their own historical events. Tourism
enhance
Suggestion
enhances
employment rate
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the employment rate
 and economy growth. Mixing with other people is a healthy relationship. To recapitulate, Travelling to other countries is a source of pleasure. It is a good way of showing acceptance and affection towards others by following their rituals and
ideology but
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ideology, but
 it needs to be an option, not an obligation for visitors to comply with.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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