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Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do in order to have a satisfying working life?

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Nowadays for choosing
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career
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a career
 is most important for everyone in
life
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. Some people choose
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career
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careers
 in early
stage
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 and stay on it. I completely agree with the statement, I think it provides more responsibility and better focus towards their aim from an early
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To begin
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, choose
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careers
 in early
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 gives more
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 for sharping skills which cope to succeed the
career
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.
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, people enjoy more while working as they choose
career
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 earlier where they got interested.
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, they people have more chances to succeed in
life
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 those get sense to follow or choose
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career
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careers
 in younger age
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: A lot of successful persons talk in interviews they want to become artists, singers and scientist of school age.
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, some people didn’t choose
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careers
 at an early
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, some people don’t like their work but still they spent leisure
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in
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on
 hobbies for satisfying their lives.
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, some choose to spend
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 with families like taking tours on vacations.
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, some individuals try to make work interesting, so they can enjoy their work rather than to feel bored. In a nutshell, adopt
career
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 at an early
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 gives a more satisfying feeling while working, but people should make
life
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 easier to do some hobbies, spend
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 with families and try to make stress free
life
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 in their working environment.
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