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Writing Samples
Band 8

Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that is runs, in order to save money write a letter to the local council.in your letter give detils of how you and your friends or family use the centre explain why the sports and liesure centre is important for the local community describe the possible effects on local peaple if the centre closes

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Dear Sir\Madam, I am writing
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 letter in hopes of convincing you not to close our leisure centre. Our family utilizes
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 space as of form of socializing
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 relieving all the work stress developed during the day. Spending time here has been a major part of our lives which we look forward to every evening.
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,
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 centre creates a platform for the people in the local community to connect
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 promoting physical activities that help them be fit and healthy. These connections built in turn develop a safer environment for the younger and elderly. Even though the money saved by closing
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 centre could be used to update the public services of the locality, it would remove a place for the community to come together and resolve minor issues
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 increasing a sense of loneliness in the older folk, who usually live alone, and the only form of connection for them is through
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 wonderful avenue. Thank you for your consideration. Yours Faithfully, John

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task response
Your letter effectively addresses the prompt, but including specific examples or personal stories could strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Consider using a variety of sentence structures and transition words to enhance flow and readability.
coherence and cohesion
You've provided a clear structure to your letter, with a suitable greeting, well-organized body paragraphs, and a polite closing, which makes it easy to follow.
task achievement
Your writing tone is appropriately formal and polite, fitting the context of a letter to a local council, which enhances the task achievement score.
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