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In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #smoke #places #people
The problem of tobacco smoking and smoking bans are confrontation between smokers and non-smokers because they have strong views about their rights. Now a large number of countries have decided to ban smoking in indoor areas and public places. If a person wants to
smoke
, he should come in a special room for smoking and I agree with the statement.
To begin
 with Medical studies has shown that smokers are able to have health issues
such
 as heart attack, lung cancer, and skin cancer. Smoking
also
 causes problems for the owners and workers, due to they want to have more breaks for
smoke
Suggestion
a smoke
. As well as cigarettes compromise not only active smokers but
also
 people who are passive smokers.
Smoke
 lovers are better to search a smoking area due to it does not have any negative impact to a person who loathes
smoke
 of the cigarette.
Also
, it has many effects on the environment
such
 as, it pollutes the air quality of the premises, and the stench of the
smoke
 remains in the area for a long time. In
this
 connection restriction is a radical change from the way things used to be until quite recently. Smokers are against restrictions.
Firstly
, they say that passive smokers make the choice to breathe
smoke
Suggestion
the smoke
 of cigarette or not. If they would prefer not to
smoke
 passively,
then
 they do not need to visit places where smoking is permitted. Smoking is not against the law, so individuals should have the freedom to
smoke
 where they wish. In conclusion, if the government illegal to
smoke
 in public places
This
 would improve the health of thousands of people.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory problems
  • cardiovascular disease
  • clean air
  • public health
  • hospital admissions
  • economic benefits
  • smoking cessation
  • cultural shift
  • healthcare costs
  • smoke-free laws
  • enforcement
  • designated smoking areas
  • compliance
  • social attitudes
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