28. Today, most people get married and give birth in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Is it a positive or negative development in your opinion? To what extent do you support this development?

In the contemporary era, most

females

tend to secure their careers

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in their early years of

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, which

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to the fact that more

females

tend to marry and become mothers in their late thirties. As one of

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, I definitely opine that

women

will benefit more if they start their

families

later.

However

, under certain

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, marrying and having babies in old

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also

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negative impacts

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them.

To begin

with, it is easy for

women

to focus on their careers and establish their financial independence if they stay single until later in their thirties.

Firstly

, single

women

will be more flexible and competitive in the workforce. They are as competent as males in a job setting without the restriction for

children

and

families

.

Children

and

families

may be obstacles for

women

's careers because taking care of

children

and doing household

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will distract their attention and energy from their jobs.

Besides

, postponing getting

marriage

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and giving birth to

children

will assist

females

to focus

to earn

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money so that they will be able to provide a better living environment for their

children

and prevent stresses relevant to financial issues.

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that many housewives worldwide still rely on their husbands for a living. If

women

marry early, there is a higher chance for them to become housewives

due to

traditional views. Obviously, more

women

have

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to live

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the lifestyle that they prefer.

This

is the result of human civilization and feminism.

However

, giving

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birth in

late

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30s or early 40s will be a

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pregnancy, which increases the risk for mothers or babies to suffer from health conditions

such

as high blood pressure in pregnant

women

or Down syndrome in babies. The mortality rate of pregnant

women

is higher when they are over 35 years old.

Moreover

,

women

becoming a mother in their later 30s have a tougher time to adapt their new roles than those in their early 20s. In conclusion,

due to

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activities, nowadays,

females

will have equal opportunities in the workforce.

This

may contribute to the phenomenon that they tend to marry and give birth in their later 30s

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the above reasons.

However

,

women

marrying and being

mother

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in

late

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30s will

also

have some drawbacks for their health and their

children

's health

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.

Therefore

,

females

should choose the proper moment for themselves to start their

families

individually.