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Many people find it hard to balance their work with other part of their lives. What is the reason for this? How can this problem be overcome?

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It seems to be an unsolved problem for many to find a reasonable
work
-life harmony.
This
 essay will suggest that the main reason for
that is
 an increasing speed of
business
 processes, so the majority of people can’t find room in their schedule to unwind. The viable solution to overcome
that is
 to improve people’s
time
 management skills and spread them not only
on
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at
for
to
work
 but
also
 on their leisure
time
. Nowadays the
business
 environment is under the pressure of everyday changes
,
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,
due to the increasing growth of technology
development
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developers
. On no account should the huge influence of modern improvement in production and service, that includes information systems, internet and robotics be ignored, as all previously mentioned speeds up
business
 activity. From one side the quality of our life tends to the better side, but the opposite side is the spread of our
work
 activities in other parts of our life. The recent research provided by the Financial Times magazine showed that more than 90 percent of people nowadays suffer from damaged
work
-life
balance
. It seems hard from the
first
 sight to find a way to a balanced lifestyle, but I am totally convinced that
firstly
 one should use and improve common
time
 management in their daily activities for establishing the
balance
 between
work
 and home mostly by planning leisure
time
 in the daily schedule.
Secondly you
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Secondly, you
 are supposed to follow your plans strictly and don’t mix
time
 for
work
 and
time
 for the family. In a short
time
, probably within a month or two, you will have got used to separate
time
 for home and for
business
, so the crucial
balance
 will be achieved. Most politicians in Europe, due to the research of National University, after they have started to plan
time
 for non-
business
 life directly in the daily schedule, mentioned that their
work
-life
balance
 has improved. In conclusion, though all people are different in their approach to a balanced lifestyle, I am sure that scheduling our non-
business
 plans using
time
 management skills
is
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are
 a viable solution for the problem.

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