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Every years several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if they are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
this
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 day and age, Most
languages
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 have already disappeared and the remainder have a likelihood of becoming extinct. It is argued that several
languages
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 become endangered each year and numerous individuals align with the view that multitudinous
languages
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 are no longer crucial and their lifework would be less complex with limited
languages
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. I completely disagree with
this
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 concept and will discuss
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 in detail in the subsequent paragraph. To commence with, indigenous
languages
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 are a means of communication and a necessity for creatures like humans to preserve their values, norms, traditions and cultures.
On the other hand
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, Each
language
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 has its own history, diversity and way of life with particular grammar rules, phrases and especially accents which represent a certain tribe, and thereby existing of knowledge, information and history of ancestors.
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,
according to
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 UNESCO Atlas, in Nepal, Vulnerable
languages
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 like Tsum, Seke and Nubri have been wiped out
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 the loss of their native speakers.
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, the loss of indigenous
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 means the loss of scientific information and history.
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, To have fewer
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 means to get a lesser
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 and to have difficulty in learning foreign
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. It is rightly said that knowing two
languages
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 means possessing two souls. Bilingual or multilingual
people
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 tend to be broad-minded which is why they have certainly more problem-solving skills, decision-making capabilities and enormous
opportunities
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 in multifarious fields of their lives than
people
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 who do not have.
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, many Vietnamese
people
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 cannot comprehend English
language
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 proficiency
although
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 it is the universal
language
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, which hinders them from having advanced learning experiences and
opportunities
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 in a foreign land.
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, limited
languages
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 create turbulence for non-native speakers and they would be forced to adopt a second
language
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.
To conclude
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, fewer
languages
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 help
people
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 in their work life.
However
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, I affirm that losing indigenous
languages
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 decreases work
opportunities
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 and not anyone can learn a new
language
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 fluently.
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, it is important to protect and promote our mother tongue to avoid issues.

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Task Achievement
Make sure the introduction clearly addresses the topic and includes a thesis statement that outlines your main arguments.
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Develop each main point with specific reasons, examples, and details that support your position.
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Ensure that the conclusion provides a succinct summary of your arguments and a clear statement of your stance on the issue without introducing new ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Organize your essay so that there is a logical flow of ideas from the introduction through to the conclusion. Each main point should be presented in a separate paragraph with clear topic sentences.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs together, such as conjunctions, pronouns, and transition words.
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Strive to maintain a formal and academic tone throughout your essay, avoiding colloquial language and contractions.
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