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The maps below show the development of a city in HCM in 1995 and now.

The maps below show the development of a city in HCM in 1995 and now.
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The maps illustrate the growth of
a
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city
 where people live in Ho Chi Minh in 1995 and now.
Overall
, in 1995, to the northeast of
city
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the city
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 there was a farmland area, a forest part section and a hotel,
while
, to the northwest, there
were
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was
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housing
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a housing
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 area and some shops. To the south of
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the city
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city
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,city
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 there was a fishing port, and there was a fish market and café in the west and east, respectively.
Over development
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 time, there are many changes, namely apartments and car
park
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parks
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, but
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the hotel
a hotel
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hotel
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hotels
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, café,
housing
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and housing
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 remain the same with changes in size. At the present time, farmland and forest park
area
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areas
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 had been replaced by golf and tennis in the northeast. To the northwest of
city
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the city
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, several homes had been built, and some shops had been replaced
some
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 restaurants. To the south of the road,
fishing
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the fishing
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 port had been demolished. A fishing market had been changed by apartments in the west of
city
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the city
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, and there is a car park beside a hotel.
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