It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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ere is a common belief that local

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is more important to children than

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statement I believe that

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should be equally important. I believe the notion that local

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is more valuable than

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should be rejected. Some people may claim that the insights into the local historical values are compl

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gh for one to live. Their claim could be true a few decades ago when most interpersonal communications were between people of the same race and origin.

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view is now outdated, as the

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has become globalized and international business and migrant workers have made any community a global village. In

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context, an understanding of a foreign country’s

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would enable future local workers to reinforce the relationship between them and expatriates from that country.

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, I am strongly convinced that children would benefit the most only when the learning of local

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is placed parallel to that of

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. To understand a local historical event, children should put the regional and sometimes even

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historical era into consideration.

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, children should acknowledge that the event that Vietnam regained its independence after defeating the Japanese troops in Indochina in 1945 only happened after a series of relevant events in the

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War II, one of which is the surrender of Japan to the Allies. In

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way of learning, children would understand

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more deeply and thoroughly. All the existing data has p

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ncrete foundation that the study of local

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should always be parallel to that of

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practice would guarantee that children learn

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more comprehensively and be able to tighten the bond with migrant workers in their country.

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It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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