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STUDENTS SHOULD BE TAUGHT ACADEMIC KNOWLEDGE SO THAT THEY CAN PASS EXAMS, AND SKILLS SUCH AS COOKING OR DRESSING SHOULD NOT BE TAUGHT. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE/DISAGREE

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Some people believe that students should be given academic knowledge to take the examination results and should be given skills
such
 as cookery and dressing.From my personal perspective, I completely dissatisfied with
this
 opinion and several reasons will be put forward to prove my view in the following paragraphs
To begin
 with, it is clear that academic backgrounds are no substitute for essential living skills. Take the academic knowledge stands
an
Suggestion
a
 requisite role in
student’s study
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a student’s study
the student’s study
 and work,
likewise
 the ability to cook and dress up in the
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
.
Next
, academic subjects supply students basic knowledge which will be
lead
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led
 to the
third
 education system.
On the other hand
, without a deep understanding
students
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student
 may fail the exams and have to study these subjects again, which it is required spare time and finance.
However
, dressing, has a major impact
of
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on
student’s image
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the student’s image
. So that they should be taught at school as subjects.
Second reason
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The second reason
 is why students still need to learn practical skills are shown the environmental requirement. To illustrate, many school children who far from their families usually need life skills as cooking will be helpful to prepare meals on their own
instead
 of eating out at caffé and restaurants.
As a result
, many people suffer obesity at
early age
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an early age
.
Therefore
, it is
responsibility
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the responsibility
 of
school
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the school
schools
 to provide the student with soft skills. In conclusion, despite academic curriculum is needed to conduct simple examinations, skills
such
 as cooking and dressing should be the focus of students as they have a serious impact on their lives.
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