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The two layouts illustrated what the park looked like in 1980 and present day. As it can be seen in the two layouts, the park has been renovated in the past 30 years with the similar size.

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The two layouts illustrated what the
park
 looked like in 1980 and present day. As it can be seen in the two layouts, the
park
 has been renovated in the past 30 years with the similar size. A close look at the layouts revealed that the previous pathway running from the northwest corner to the southeast
one
 of the part was demolished and
new
Suggestion
a new one
new ones
the new one
one
 that leads to four sides of the
park
 was constructed after 1980. The grass field had been separated into four regions by the new path in each corner of the
park
. The trees in the northeast corner had been dislodged and two
wood
Suggestion
wooden
 tables with benches were added in the same place which provided facilities for picnic. Some trees were planted along the edge of the path on the south side of the picnic region. The small pond remained in the same
place but
Accept comma addition
place, but
one
 of four benches was removed. The
flowerbeds
Suggestion
flower beds
 were demolished as well and provided more fields for children to play. The fences
in
Suggestion
at
 the south entrance and the walls along all edges of the
park
 had been removed. Overall, the
park
 has been renovated into a
one
 without walls and provide full acc
ess
Suggestion
to
 for the public during the past 30 years
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