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STUDENTS SHOULD BE TAUGHT ACADEMIC KNOWLEDGE SO THAT THEY CAN PASS EXAMS, AND SKILLS SUCH AS COOKING OR DRESSING SHOULD NOT BE TAUGHT. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE/DISAGREE?

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In the modern world most people are of the belief that students ought to learn more academic knowledge so as to be able to pass exams and ethics
such
 as cooking and dressing are not considered a vital part of education. The essay attempts to throw light on both aspects of present argument and reach a reasoned conclusion. Much of the knowledge related to academic subjects
have
Suggestion
has
 a few practical uses.
However academic
Accept comma addition
However, academic
 education and qualification are really needed in the future career of each person. What I mean by
this
 is that even though academic knowledge is to complete school assignments and tests, is academic qualification required by any company to possess a good working position and satisfying wage.
On the other hand
,
capability
Suggestion
capable
 of cooking and dressing play an indispensable role in any person’s
lifetime
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lifetime, although
although
 both of them are not included in school curriculum. It is mainly because, when it comes to taking care of themselves, school-graduates can undoubtedly choose to go abroad to study, if they are equipped with aforementioned abilities.
In addition
, even at work people not only should work efficiently, but
also
 they have to be polite and pleasantly dressed up. To illustrate, dressing appropriately and behaving properly in various situations can make a positive impression on others. In conclusion, though academic background is important for passing the exams, the skills
such
 as cooking and dressing are not less crucial. I ponder, those skills are
prerequisite
Suggestion
a prerequisite
 for every individual in order to make so good a progress.
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