Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

That is

a common belief that

music

is the best option of gathering human beings of various cultures and ages together. In my opinion, I completely agree with

this

idea. Actually,

music

is the best way of feeling happy or sometimes sad. It easily impacts to the people and changes their emotions.

Additionally

, it makes people to bring their culture together, not only as a person listens different kinds of musics of the several countries, but

also

they adapt to

music

's origin (its country, singer, language, and so on.)

For example

, nowadays fans of the pop are a lot of in different states. As they love to listen Korean musics, they are

also

really into to learn its language on account of their passion. As it is mentioned above, when someone has a great passion to listen one

music

, they want to search about a singer of that

music

too. And they become to have idols of singers.

Moreover

, there exist some norms and cultures that even people don't want to cooperate with other nations. So, the

music

is a good method for them to be cooperative and to share their feelings with each others.

Finally

, another reason for it can be said that there is no limit of ages that cannot listen to

music

, all human beings have a right to listen to a tune (from child to old.) Not only youngs listen to modern one, but

also

some of them are really into to listen to old songs. In short, I believe that

music

is the best opportunity to become cooperative with other nations and it is a good way of sharing our sensations as well.

Mon Mar 30 2020

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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generational gaps
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