The globalisation has brought both advantages and disanvantages.To what destent do you agree or disagree?

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Police officers around the world have risen their awareness that in the

last

few years the average age of people who have conducted any sort of crime has significantly decreased. There are different reasons for adolescents to start breaking the

law but

Accept comma addition

law, but

most often they do it due to social and economic reasons.

Firstly

, many teenagers

conduct

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conducts

some type of crime,

such

as robbery, because of their poor financial situation and friends influence. Most of them live with their parents and their access to

money

is highly restricted, their carriers control how much

money

their children can spend and what to buy.

For instance

, some adolescents have friends who smoke, drink or even take drugs and they want to join them in order not to be kicked out from their circle. Since they lack

money

for cigarettes and alcohol, children are forced to steal some

money

from their parents, friends or even conduct burglary. Another reason for teens to be involved in crimes are because of their parents who are criminals themselves. There are families with different criminal backgrounds and children are raised from a very young age to become criminals.

This

is something like a family tradition. Mainly,

this

children

Suggestion

child

are involved

Suggestion

is involved

pickpocketing

Suggestion

pick pocketing

for example

cultural and sightseeing places which are visited by many tourists

Accept space

who are busy to take photographs rather than minding their wallets.

Additionally

, the parents know that in case their children are

got

Suggestion

getting

caught stealing, no charges will be pressed due to their fragile age. To help youngsters to understand the consequences of breaking the law, schools must get involved. Police officers and psychologists should be invited to give lectures about the role of teenagers in the society and the importance to behave according the law. Adolescents should be allowed to work part-time after school and on weekends to earn their own pocket

money

and be a little bit financially

indepent

from their parents. But most importantly, they must be taught that their actions can have a great impact on

community

Suggestion

the community

and if they conduct a crime, they will be punished for it and one wrong step could cost theirs or someone else's life.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

361 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

International trade
Economic growth
Cultural exchange
Erosion of local cultures
Homogenization
Income inequality
Economic displacement
Competitive pressures
Environmental degradation
Pollution
Resource depletion
Climate change

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