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Today many people do not realize how important the natural world is.why is this?how can people learn more about the importance of natural world?

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There is a worrying trend nowadays, that most of the people fail to understand the core value of the natural
world
.
This
 essay intends to
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 why is
this
 phenomenon and suggest some measures that might help to alleviate the problem to some extent. Man is a part of the environment and has done more to upset the natural
world
 during his short span on earth than any other living creature. He has done
this
 by his ignorance, his greed, his thoughtless folly and his wanton wastefulness. Today’s
world
 is unable to satisfy the demands of people looking for space and dominance.
This
borders
Suggestion
border
 upon truth, that humans fury broke loose, they
have became
Suggestion
have become
 extrovert and started to live only for personal interest by ignoring the external
world
. Environmental racism takes international forms as well. The solutions are not easy, but joint efforts by the government and the people can help to lessen the gravity of the situation.
Firstly
, organizing eco-campaigns throughout the
world
 that aim to make aware of wildlife the local inhabitants.
Secondly
, eco-organizations should investigate
this
 case from different angles and try to convey the concept of the environment to the people by conducting worldwide seminars.
Finally
, if there is to be any remedy, that remedy ultimately lies in the hands of the young, and the sooner they start doing something about it, the better. Summing up, the significance of the natural
world
 cannot be easily realized. We should look into the relevant steps that might mitigate the problem, not to solve.

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