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The promoters of social media claim that they are connecting people and enabling people to share like never before. While critics claim that social media site often impinges upon one’s privacy. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#promoters #media #people #critics #site #impinges #one’s #privacy
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media
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 most revolutionary thing that has ever happened to mankind in terms of communication between two or more
people
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 and sharing of
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whereas
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privacy
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 has been hit hard all the time
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 social
media
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.I strongly believe that social
media
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 aids in better communication among
people
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.
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views
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a conclusion
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. To embark upon, social
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 is
great
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a great
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mean
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means
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 to
share
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content
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 online for
personal
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 and professional
purpose
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along with
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 excellent communication.
Due to
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we can
share
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content
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 online in
real time
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 with billions of
people
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 around the globe and can connect with anyone over
internet
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the internet
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. Whatsapp,
linkedin
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LinkedIn
Linkedin
 and
instagran
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Instagram
 are some of the few social
media
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 platforms which are used extensively for data sharing and connecting online,
as
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instance
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an instance
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.
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, it has enabled
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many social
media
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 businesses which were not there before the era of social networking like digital marketing, online promotions, sale of subscriber base of online channels or pages.
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,
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had
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 always been
in
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at
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 risk over social
media
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 platforms.
Due to
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 the fact that it is generally seen that hackers dig into others's
account
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accounts
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by hacking them and
hurt
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hurting
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 their
privacy
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.
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, there is a history of cyber attacks on
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the internet
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confidential information.
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, contacts over social
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has
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 a disguised identity and their online appearance cannot be trusted and any kind of
content
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 shared over there with anyone known cannot be trusted. In my opinion, social
media
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 gives us
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a
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 platform where we can
share
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content
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 with others and can communicate with them online with much ease and it has
armstrong
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 us in every possible way.For
instace
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instance
, via
whatsapp
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WhatsApp
, skype,
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or houseparty
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houseparty
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house party
house-party
 we can contact so many
people
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 and
share
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 our views very easily. To summarize,Social
media
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 applications like
facebook
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, skype,
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and instagram
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instagram
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Instagram
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 are some of
few
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the few
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 social
media
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 platforms which help us communicate and enable us
for
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to
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 web sharing of
content
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.Apart from that social
media
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 hurt
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privacy
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the privacy
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 of users's data as well because of hacking and disguised identity.But I believe that internet
platfors
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platforms
platform
 help us in many ways to communicate and
share
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the
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apply
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content
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.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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