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Many students decide to further their study abroad what are the benefits and drawbacks of studying abroad, to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#students #study
Nowadays
,
Accept space
,
The younger generation loves to connect with
this
 technological world. They love to experience a broad view in each and every aspect. They have curiosity to know various technologies and course to do in the topnotch university in their nation or abroad. Many students decide to go abroad for
further
study
 in their field or pursuing the master degree in different subjects. There are both pros and cons for the outside
study but
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study, but
 from my opinion, I personally believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Firstly
, here
such
 a so many students now go for the abroad
study
 for the betterment of themselves and
also
 for the future development and growth too.
Furthermore
, The Germany is the best in the automobile sector.
Therefore
, The students who have experience in
this
 field is eager to go in there.
Also
, Students have learnt the German language for the
study
 purpose and
also
 pass their higher level of
this
 language to get a job hunt in
this
 competitive life.
Secondly
, The major profit for the abroad
study
 is that,
This
 open at various door of success in master their field and use
this
 opportunity to advance their career and their lifestyle too.
Moreover
, The recent
study
 concludes that the unemployment rate of the abroad countries is half less in the percentage compare to the India. So that
this
 will be
such
 a pivotal impact on the student life too.
On the other hand
, There are always a drawback too.
This
 amount of huge money can not be afford who are poor or a middle class person.
Therefore
 Financial problem is complicated and disturb the students' mind too.
In addition
, The weather condition is not a uniform compare with the India and to adding
this
 there is socialize problems in the starting while you go for the abroad
study
. To conclude, I totally agree with my opinion that there is a drawback too, but the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. I completely agree with my
this
 statement.

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