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Grandparents take care of children when their parents are out at work. What are the advantages and possible disadvantages of this?

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In the contemporary world, there is a trend that both parents are working to live a better lifestyle. Due to
this
, they have to depend on their parents to take
care
 of their children.
Although
 it is advantageous, there are drawbacks too. Both advantages, along with disadvantages, are elaborated
further
. There are several advantages of
care
 taken by the grandparent. The most prominent
one
 is, as grandparents nurture their children, they have experience of upbringing the children.
As a result
, they understand children better and know how children feel when they are hungry or want something to play. Another advantage is that the transformation of cultural value from
one
 generation to another generation can be done by grandparents.
For example
, how to respect the elders when elder come home.
Furthermore
, when grandparents take
care
 of their grandson, they do not charge any fees.
On the other hand
, the drawback cannot be overlooked.
Firstly
, the majority of grandparents are either retired from their job, or on the verge of retirement. So, they might not have the physical stamina to handle a child.
Secondly
, they are not professional in taking
care
 of children. By
this
, I mean the health of children are more vulnerable, so
one
 needs to take extra precaution while dealing with children.
Finally
, in an emergency,
one
 needs to take action quickly. Like, when children get hurt by any object grandparents might not able to do
this
 due to their physical limits. In conclusion, though there is some limitation, I think, grandparents are better people in
this
 world to take
care
 of the children at home and kids who have
this
 opportunity are very fortunate according to me.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • Finally
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  • In general

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