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Some people believe that environmental problems are too big for individuals to deal with, while other think that individual should take some action. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #individuals #action
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In recent times the world is facing severe environmental contamination issues. Some individuals believe that environmental issues too big of one person to handle;
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, others argue that every
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person
 should take action to save the
environment
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. The issue consists of different points of view. Prior to my inclination, both the views are elaborated
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. On the one hand,
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believers
a believer
 of the former view
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puts
 forward their argument. The most prominent one is, a person cannot control the contributing causes, which is the deteriorating
environment
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. As these causes are spread across the globe and individual, they have no control over them even if they intend to do so.
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, rules and regulations relating
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 are regulated by the local authority; individuals have nothing to do with
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. Due to a lack of authority, they are helpless to save nature.
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, according to a group of people, individuals can make a difference to save the
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 by changing their regular habits.
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, by reducing the
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 of gadgets or machines which produce greenhouse gases which are the major contributor to global warming.
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, reduce the uses of vehicles running by the
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 of diesel, which emit harmful carbon dioxide.
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, take the initiative to
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 recyclable material during daily work.
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,
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 a paper bag for shopping
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 of using a plastic bag. In conclusion,
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 people have different views about individuals' contributions to saving the
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. I firmly believe that individuals can make the difference to save the
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 by altering their lifestyle and with the help of the government.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental issues
  • sustainable habits
  • systemic industrial emissions
  • deforestation
  • sustainable operations
  • eco-friendly products
  • consumer demand
  • public advocacy
  • grassroots movements
  • legislative changes
  • conserve energy
  • reduce waste
  • recycling
  • supply chains
  • international cooperation
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