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Speaking more than one language is important these days. Therefore, children should start learning a second language during their school time. Do you agree or disagree?

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Over the past century, the globalization has allowed people to travel across the world for work, study or tourism, which has led to the need of knowing different
language
. Certain people feel that learning a
second
language
 will detach their children from the cultural values of their nation while many people, including myself, believe that learning new
language
 will benefit children in many aspects. Certain
society people
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society, people
 want to stick with their traditional thoughts and culture because of which they do not prefer to teach their children the languages other than the native one. They believe that if a child is introduced to a foreign
language
, the child will be influenced by it and will start loosing the roots of native
language
,
also
 it will start creating a gap between the generations because young generation will not be able to communicate with
old
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the older
 generation.
However
, old generation will understand the positive side of learning
new
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a new language
language
 when they
are introduce
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are introduced
are introducing
have introduced
 to the outcome of knowing foreign languages.
Other
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Another
 kind of people believe that learning foreign
language
 is the need of an hour, as government of many countries are offering
job opportunity
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job opportunities
, permitting people to settle in their nation and promoting tourism. It will be easy for a person to travel to the other nation if he/she knows their
language
 as communication will become easy, so it
is prefer
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is preferred
prefers
 to teach
language
 at
very young age
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a very young age
. If a
language
 is taught to a child in his childhood, he will easily learn it and will have
good command
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a good command
 over it. So nowadays, parent are encouraging their children to learn more than one
language
 by providing them classes in school or through internet. Personally, I agree with the thought of being bi-linguistic or
muti
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multi
-linguistic as it will help in
development
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the development
 of a person as well as society.

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