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University students are increasingly studying abroad as a part of thier studies.do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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days every
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day, every
day every
 student has a dream after completing his
graduation he
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graduation, he
 will go abroad for higher
studies it
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studies, it
 is the common scenario for maximum students.
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 day I am going to talk about the advantages of higher studies. In my country Bangladesh which is very small and it is developed
county
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
 at all.
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 county
provide
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provides
 standard education in graduate program University level, but students are facing problem after completing their graduation when they enter into a
job
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.Its very challenging for them
,
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,
the education which they learnt from University did not match in their Professional life after that they feel insecure in
thier
of them or themselves
their
 own profession.After
that students
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that, students
 want to get
higher
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a higher degree
degree
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 from abroad.Many students
also
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 follow their seniors who got
higher
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a higher degree
degree
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 from abroad and now they run their own business successfully, graduate students think if they acquire any higher
degree
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 from abroad they can be a successful
businessmen
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businessman
.After going
abroad many
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abroad, many
 senior brothers obtain more
degree
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 and
setteled
established or decided beyond dispute or doubt
settled
 themselves in abroad by taking
attractive
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an attractive job
job
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 with smart salary.
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job
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 and salary
attracts
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attract
 our current students and they eagerly wanted to go abroad. For getting higher
degree
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 going to abroad it has some disadvantages
also
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.Many students go abroad for getting
higher
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a higher degree
higher degrees
degree
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 after leaving
attractive
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an attractive job
job
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 in his own country.He
want
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wants
 more than
enough but
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enough, but
 for
acquaring
the act of acquiring something
acquiring
higher
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a higher degree, he
a higher degree he
degree
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 he lost three or four years from his
job
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 experience.After getting higher
degree
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 the
studen
a learner who is enrolled in an educational institution
student
 returned to his own
county
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
 and try to manage better
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job but
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job, but
 he failed to manage
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then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 he repent and feel worthless.The students think
not going
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isn't going
 to abroad if he continued his previous
job
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 he would get
promotion
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a promotion
 and salary
also
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then
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 he felt repent. But for my opinion for obtaining
higher
Suggestion
a higher degree
higher degrees
degree
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 from abroad maximum time bring success so we should try to obtain more
degree
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 from abroad.Because the curriculum of study abroad is best.

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