The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The given chart illustrates the number of students who take part
of
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in
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5 different leisure activities.
Overall
, we can say
that
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that boy
those boys
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boys
took the majority of these activities.
It is clear that
the most popular leisure activity among
this
age group is watching television almost all children in Australia watch tv in their free time,
However
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in
the
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three of the four other activities,
Boys
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participation was significantly greater than
girls
. The
next
most popular activity is playing computer games with 80% of the
boys
and 60% of the
girls
, bike riding follows computer games in terms of popularity, just under
three quarters
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three-quarters
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of
boys
say they like cycling and just under
two thirds
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two-thirds
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girls
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of girls
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say so, The only activity which
girls
chose more than
boys
is Art and craft with just over 50 per cent of
girls
like to draw compared to only about 40 per cent of
boys
. The figures are showing that
the
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boys
being
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are
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more active and
girls
more
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are more
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creative in Australia.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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