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Computer is one of the important inventions. Do you agree or disagree?

#computer #inventions
It is thought by some people that English, which now most widely spoken
language
 in the world, may
one
 day predominate over all other languages and result in their eventual disappearance. Having
one
language
 certainly aid communicating and economic grow
th but the
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growth, but
re will
also
 be some drawbacks. to c
om
Suggestion
To
mence with, having sole
language
 spoken all over the world will make communication convenient.
Furthermore
, business
such
 as importing and exporting between nations can be efficient. It is more accessible for people to communicate by
one
language
 rather than being bili
ngual which wil
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bilingual, which
l surely help in globalization.
Moreover
,
one
language
 would be advantageous is that it would help economic growth. With all people speaking the same
language
, there will be less barriers and therefor trade would flourish between countries. On othe
r hand, th
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the other hand
ere are obvious disadvantages to having only
one
 global
language
.
Firstly
, it would mean that all other languages would eventually disappear, along with them, their cultures. The diversity of cultures is
one
 of the joys
this
 world has to offer.
Secondly
, it would result in the collapse of
tourism
 because there would be no reason to travel for pleasure and interest if all countries had the same
language
 and similar cultures.
This
 would devastate many countries econ
omically tha
Suggestion
economies
t rely on
tourism
 as a source of income.
For example
, Culinary
tourism
, is now considered a vital component of the
tourism
 experience. Dining out is common among tourists and "food is believed to rank alongside climate, accommodation, and scenery" in importance to tourists. Italy as a cult
ure famous is
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culture, famous
a great example for food
tourism
. In conclusion, a single universal
language
 is definitely beneficial for every country and improves the relationship among them, but it is certainly detrimental for
the
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to
 local
language
 and damages the local culture in future.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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