In some areas of the US,a "curfew" is imposed in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this.

It is true that children should be learnt at a young age about the difference between right and wrong
path
. It is necessary some penalties to help them learn
this
distinction. I disagree with
this
opinion, because
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe that we have always time to tackle any issue at a young age without punishment. On the one hand, I accept that if we do not punish our young children on a wrong
path
, several related problems can be anticipated. The main issue is there will be
increase
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an increase
in the number of crimes in our society,
for
example our
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example, our
young
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younger
generation tend to do minor crimes
such
as pickpocketing, stealing
bicycle
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bicycles
a bicycle
and shoplifting, many children
can not
can not
cannot
be afraid to steal anything. It will be a potential problem.
As a result
, it can pose a real threat to society.
Nevertheless I
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Nevertheless, I
believe that it would be unfair to punish children at
a
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an
early age. There are two main reasons why it could be argued that children shouldn't be punished now.
Firstly
, life is more complex and difficult,
as a result
, our young generation
also tend
Suggestion
also tends
to do mistake during their life, we should understand it and give them more chances to choose a right
path
without punishment,
for example
sometimes children have to do minor crime at the
first
time, we should not penalty them immediately.
Secondly
, parents and teachers seem to be more aggressive nowadays and they inclined
to do punish
Suggestion
to punish
their children.
we
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We
should
stop
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stop, such
such
as actions and create some programs, activities in order to deter punishments. In conclusion, punishments couldn't help to prevent choosing children bad or good behaviour,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believe that our children choose always a right
path
without
punishment
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punitive
actions.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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