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Band 8.5

You have just received a letter from an overseas university saying that your IELTS band score of 6 is too low for admission to any of its Master's courses (You need 6.5) Write a letter to the admissions officer. In your letter Introduce yourself Enquire about any alternative ways of gaining entrance

Dear Mr. Terry, I hope
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 message finds you well. My name is Ashunkumar Patel, and I recently applied for the Master of Applied Computing
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 at the University of Windsor. I have just received a letter from your admissions office stating that my IELTS score of 6.0 does not meet the minimum requirement of 6.5 for admission.
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 I understand the importance of language proficiency, I would like to inquire if there are any alternative options that could help me gain entrance into the
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. I have heard from former students that the university offers a language pathway
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 for applicants who narrowly miss the language criteria. If
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 a
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 is still available, I would be very interested in enrolling and would appreciate more information on the application process or any additional requirements I must meet. I am highly motivated to join
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 and would be grateful for any guidance or support you can provide regarding possible next steps. Thank you for considering my request. I look forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Ashunkumar Patel

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly state your purpose in the first paragraph. This helps the reader understand your main point quickly.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph flows smoothly into the next. You can use linking words to connect ideas.
task response
Add a bit more detail about why you want to join the program. This can strengthen your letter.
suitable writing tone
You have a polite and formal tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for this context.
complete response
Your request for alternative options is clearly stated, showing your interest in the program.
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