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Nowadays we can watch entertainment performance from the screens and no need to watch it live. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s world entertainment performances can easily watch through screens,
therefore
 some argue that watching live of them become unnecessary. I do not agree with the statement because of the atmosphere and distraction problems. 
Although
 many plays, operas are recently one click away from their
audience
, a real interaction only can provide by being in the theatre. As human nature is mainly based on the senses, reaching as many senses as possible might have important roles in participants understanding of the
performance
.
For instance
, some experiences
such
 as hearing the acoustics, smelling the stage dust not only can boost the
audience
 appreciation to the
performance
, but
also
 allow them to leave the play with high satisfaction. 
Moreover
, watching a live
performance
 via laptop or TV usually comes along with distractions which cause to not fully understand about it.
This
 is because, being able to stop the video anytime the
audience
 wants, provides a sense of relaxation and reduce the perception of importance to the play.
For example
, due to the COVID-19 lockdown, theatres were closed in Turkey for two months and the Cultural Ministry uploaded many operas on their YouTube channel for their citizens to watch it,
however
 viewing numbers were relatively lower than the normal
audience
 numbers since many of the citizens prefers to watch with their bare eyes. To summarize,
although
 it is convenient to access entertainment performances from the screens, I do not think
this
 development can take the place of the old-fashioned
performance
 watching because the experience which is provided to the participants and receiving attention to the play from them would not be in the same level.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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